Date: Jul 03, 2012 12:37 pm Title: Chapter 13
Was I da only 1 lookin forward to dat foursome? ...just sayin ^_~ , and u wrong for dat gurl puttin dat idea n my head n then not doin it ! ! ! Plz continue :-) ,,
Blame It On yanagirl07!!!!!! Lol
Date: Jun 30, 2012 02:46 pm Title: Chapter 12: Truth Is Out Now
I love this...keep goin plz... !
Thank you! Glad you're enjoyign the story!
And lol at the review that you left on Chapter 13!
I wasn't in a foursome writing kind of mood lol! Maybe in another chapter we'll see them again ;)
Date: May 08, 2012 01:52 pm Title: Chapter 10 : Haters Be Hatin'
ohh shoot Mike said he could smell her coming lmbo! stanking ass! hahaha anyway Cassidy better watch out for Demetria. Good chapter :-)
Author's Response: Lmao. Yup she is definitely stank. Even though Mike definitely don't want her, Cassidy has competetion. <33
Date: May 08, 2012 12:08 am Title: Chapter 10 : Haters Be Hatin'
Demitra needs Michael back.? Bitch you never had him.!! All she did was get on her knees!! Ugh Slut!!
Author's Response: Lmao. It looks like Cassidy is gonna have to put her in her place because shes not listening to Mike. I think Demetria needs a bath. Hm. >:). Lol <333
Date: Mar 14, 2012 07:11 pm Title: Preparations
i hope this date goes well...the chapter was great just too short but you already apologized for that so no need to do it twice *hugs*
I feel so horrible for it being so short!! Im so sorry. *hug*
Date: Mar 07, 2012 10:06 am Title: The Call
:) Alright! Here's my HONEST review...
So good idea for a story, but here's the thing...
I think five girls on one stoy is too much. There might be too many ideas going on at once and (I'm not 100% sure snce I'm not working on this story myself) that you guys are trying to fit every single one is, and it's making this pretty confusing.
The writting is confusing too. Sometimes I noticed the dialogue will be like so:
P1 blah blah blah
P2 blah blah blah
P1 blah blah blah
But sometimes it CHANGES to sometihng like this:
P1 Blah blah blah P2Blah blah blah P3 Blah blah blah P2 blah blah blah P1 blah blah blah
and it doesn't always say who's talking so when you do it like that it makes it really hard to follow.
All in all, good story idea, but ideas seem to be scattered everywhere.
Date: Mar 02, 2012 03:51 pm Title: The Call
This Demetria character is similar to the Demetria on Bad Girls club rightt.? Anyway Cassidy is finally giving Mike a chance! I can't wait to see how it turns out!
Lol! Yes thats the demetria!! :)