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Date: Sep 09, 2015 05:12 pm Title: Chapter 17. Somethin' For Dat Ass

This is great, so mad you stopped  lol

Author's Response:

Aww thanks. And sorry, lol.

Reviewer: TutThreeSevens Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 07, 2015 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 17. Somethin' For Dat Ass

Seeing the pic reminds me that I saw her in H&M in Harlem a while ago. She was wearing almost the same exact outfit funny enough. She's so pretty!

Author's Response:

I'm jelly. You saw Teyana and just now telling me this?!?!?!? Screw you Tut. Screw you girl. Lmaaaaoooo, I'm jp. 

But I am jelly though. No lie.... ;)

Wish I could see her but only on pics. Welp. I bet she was pretty. Hell she fine and I'm not even onto girls. I'm not Tatiana from ILYAAF, just being real and stating facts. No wonder why Mike wants her ass so bad. Lol.

Reviewer: TutThreeSevens Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Sep 07, 2015 09:33 pm Title: Chapter 17. Somethin' For Dat Ass

I think Ari is a high school girl that's generally nosey. I don't think she means any harm by it at all. At least not that I can see. I can see where it can be a nuisance. 

Ken seems cool. 

Hassan disturbs me. I don't like him for her at all. Tima is a smart girl but her asshole radar is turned of if she's flirting with him after what she heard about him. I can see some trouble coming from him at that party. 

Michael is cocky but he's sweet too. Juicy Curls is the best fit Tima!! I'm glad she lightened up on him and not take him too serious when he's being too full of himself. 

I knew Shanelle wasn't being sincere at all she just thirsty for attention. 

More soon!! <333

Author's Response:

Yes. Ari is a tid bit nosey. Maybe she doesn't mean any harm but people do get fed up with others always wanting to know every damn thing. Trust and believe, we all have that one person in our lobes that's like that, lol. I know I do. 

As forKennedi, she's always been the cool one to me ever since I started to write this story. 

So Hassan disturbs you? Ha, you and me both. I think he sneaky. Like really sneaky. Wolf hidingin sheep clothing sneaky. Fatima better watch out. But I can relate to where you coming from about her flirting with him after hearing what Arianne said about him and whatnot. Maybe there will be as sorta trouble at the party... we'll just have to see.

Juicy Curls is a handful. But like you said, he is a perfect fit for Tima and she knows it. Hell, even her mom is calling him son in law. Well, sorta. She just said she smells one.

I think.k the more her and Mike be around each other, the more she'd open up to him and stop being feisty all the damn time.

Last and least Shanelle.... she's just a bitch. End of this. Kml.

Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 24, 2015 10:43 pm Title: Chapter 16. Late Night Talks And Jokes

I like her decision. He was way too bold. Though, I'm not a fan of the FWB thing that could easily arise now that they've kissed but are putting off a date. I think they should hang out more at school first.

Great chapter!

Author's Response:

Yes. They need to just hang out more then maybe one day they cam go on a date. And yes, he was too bold but sh  liked the kiss. At least she didn't front about it but told him that it was a bold move. But cute nonetheless :)

Now the FWB it could happen but Mike clearly said he was not down with that at all. I don't blame.him. they should just hang out and let everything work out own it's own.

And thanks.

Reviewer: TutThreeSevens Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 24, 2015 01:39 am Title: Chapter 16. Late Night Talks And Jokes

I figured she did like the kiss as dazed as she was lol.

Michael is something else.

Really I don't think that there's a difference with just hanging out or dating. If they're hanging out alone knowing they like each other they're dating in my book. But that's just me. Getting to know each other before they get into anything is a good idea. 

Her mom did get her though. That's what mommies do. They find out the scoop by any means necessary lol.

More soon. <333 

Author's Response:

Lol, yes she was. At least she ain't front.about it and lie and said she didn't like it. She's good at that fronting crap.

And Mike just plain crazy. What us gone do with him.

That's very much true. Either way it goes, they have feelings for each other so it would be considered as a date. 

And Tima's mom, Renita is a mess. She got Fatima to tell on herself. Lol. You're right, mommies do find out regardless. 

Reviewer: nene147 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 16, 2015 06:17 am Title: Chapter 2. Must Be New Around Here

Why do I feel drama coming?

Author's Response:

Lol. Girl you're the first person who said that. There's just gonna be a lil meeting between two people.

Reviewer: nene147 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 15, 2015 09:20 pm Title: Chapter 1. A New Life

That's some house alright!  <333 

I know it's hard moving into a new city and house. Going to a new school trying to find your place.

Author's Response:

Aww you finally started to read it. 

But yes, it can be hard because you have to get so used to alot of things you're not so familiar with and new people and school. I'm pretty sure she would fit in just fine. 

Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 11, 2015 03:35 pm Title: Chapter 15. A Bet And A Kiss

That kiss was very sweet :)

I imagine Fatima has mixed feelings - lust combined with fear. She's torn.

Author's Response:

Lol yes it was. Some homebound be trying to add a lil tongue action and whatnot but it don't work like that. But I'm pretty sure she does have mixed emotions now. But we will find out in the next chapter.

Reviewer: TutThreeSevens Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 10, 2015 05:09 am Title: Chapter 15. A Bet And A Kiss

For real though these two are way to adorable. Michael is feeling her hard. 

I was so dead at "Juicy Pear headed ass nigga". DEAD you hear me. Lmaoooo. That and her threatening to back kick him in the nuts. I'm gonna use that one on folks.  

Mikey got ha numba...And Mikey wanna be more than just friends. Judging from his impulse to kiss her I would say he was caught in the moment. He didn't mean anything disrespectful by it. 

Mad for what's going brought Tima's head? Girl I can't even say. It could range from giddiness to down right wanting to really back kick his ass in the nuts. Several times. 

Cute chapter once again.

More soon BB!! <333

Author's Response:

Lol, ikr. These to are just, ugh!!!! And he is feeling hard. HARD girl.

Lmao!!! Juicy pear head as  nigga and back kickingin the nuts just came to me. And girl you're free to use it. I'ma use it on my boyfriend since he likes to play to much.

So Mike happy he got dat numbaaaa. We all know Mike wants to b  not  than just friends with Tima but he's willing to wait. He just don't know for how long.

Oh and the kiss....hmmm, he was caught in the moment alright. Caught in it deep. Lol. 

As for Tima's thoughts, it's a possibility she's going back and forth feeling giddy or wanting to screw his ass up. We won't know until the next chapter.


Reviewer: Redone Signed [Report This]
Date: Jun 27, 2015 11:38 am Title: Chapter 1. A New Life

I'll give them a look. I haven't read them thusfar as I'm not much for the "It Girl that everyone wants to be/wants to date gets Michael" scenario.  That's why I'd been waiting for this story to get longer. I prefer a different spin and I tend to binge read.

Author's Response:

Okay. And that's very understandable. But whenever you do, don't hesitate to write you opinion about them, as I said before. Just want your input on the little that is written for both stories thus far.

Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jun 26, 2015 11:17 pm Title: Chapter 14. Likes, Dislikes And Qualities

It's definitely one of if not your best chapter thus far. It felt like people weren't just talking to talk (which is often the case when people are first meeting).  Well, at least Michael and Fatima. I'm not sold on the female friends....they are nosy as hell and have yet to share anything with Fatima. They're just friendly enough and currently on a pretty superficial side.Yet, they expect more from her......

Ugh. Now I'm caught up and I want moooooore. I could totally see Fatima pulling back a little, getting closer with Michael, then pulling back a bit as time goes on. It sounds like she's had it rough, so it'll take her a bit to trust. In the meantime, I could see Michael feeling like he's a yo-yo and getting frustrated. But first, school and that party. What's going to happen when people get drunk or high?

Author's Response:

Aww thanks so much. 

And yes the female friend are a bit on the nosy side, just Arianne the most. Kennedi doesn't really seem to be nosy only when Arianne drags her name into it. If that makes any sense. Lol. And yes, the do seem as if they are. As for sharing anything with Fatima, I guess they want to wait till the friendship become more of what it is then they'll be not open. The same goes for Fatima. It depends on what they're sharing though. 

Fatima is like a car jerking backwards and forward because that's what she's doing with Michael as you said she's pulling back then getting closer and it goes on and on. She wants to get close but is afraid after what happened in her last relationship with her ex Ace which will be mentioned sometime during the story.

As for Michael, he does seem pretty frustrated being that she was frontin' in the beginning acting like she didn't like his boldness and the fact that she wasn't coming clean to her lil' feelings for him. Being that he likes her alot already, he's willing to wait for her open up and let him in on her own time when she's ready. 

Now that party after school, no telling what's gonna happen. Just stay tuned.

Btw, I have two other stories by the name of New Flame and Running Back Into You, I would love to hear you opinion on them. I just recently came up with them about a month or two ago. I just want to know what you think of them so far. I have another story too ,I Love You Always And Forever. You don't have to worry about that one but it's up to you if you wanna check it out. But the first too I mentioned, I would love to know your feedback on them. 

Reviewer: Redone Signed [Report This]
Date: Jun 26, 2015 10:47 pm Title: Chapter 13. Got It Bad

Damn, how did they end up at the same place?! LA is huge.

Author's Response:

Are you talking about Arianne, Kennedi and Xandria at the arcade? If so, that would be mentioned in the next chapter when everyone leaves.

Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jun 26, 2015 10:28 pm Title: Chapter 12. The Three Muskaroaches/New Follower

I love how Shanelle approached her and spoke in proper English. That's like Teen 101 for signs someone is being fake.

She got me in that category. No lie.

Ugh. I needed this. One of my huge pet peeves is when the OG thinks she's the shit. Most people have actual insecurities that aren't things that evaporate immediately. You've got the basis of a great story and I was just like "don't let her be a complete cliche!"


Author's Response:

Lol, your review about Shanelle approaching Fatima was different from everyone's. Most reviewers were like, "Uh, uh, she better chill or she gonna get it." Something like that. But you're a first, which is very refreshing I should say. 

Is it really a pet peeve of yours?? Lol.  But I get what you're saying about the insecurities and such. How can you be insecure one minute and not the next minute. 

And thanks, if you want, I don't mind receiving advice on how to write or something. I take well with criticism so if you feel anything you want to say I should consider then go right ahead. From the way you speak, it seem to me as if you're a great writer and know your stuff. Feel free to leave any if you like.

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Date: Jun 26, 2015 08:53 pm Title: Chapter 11. Tryin' To Break Ya Down...Butchu Playin'/Starting Off As Friends

Following her on IG doesn't mean he's feeling her; just that he's nosy and likes to look lol.

Girl I was about to rant if she jumped into a relationship with him. I'm glad she's waiting and wantint to start out as friends. He can't hit it that quick. Shoot, I'm surprised she's telling him her feelings without knowing the whole backstory about him and Hassan.

Author's Response:

Lol, you know how these lil girls are nowadays about these lil boys. But that's true, he was being nosy.

And no, Fatima ain't that crazy to move on that fast. No baby. Friends it is, and friends it will be until whatever happens that may lead yo something more. You gotta let things work out on their own instead of rushing it yourself.

But she will be getting to know the back story of him and Hassan soon. Just got to wait for the right time being that they are just starting yhis friends relationship and whatnot. Can't jump to personal things so fast.

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Date: Jun 26, 2015 07:42 pm Title: Chapter 10. Partners With The Annoyance

I think it'll be Michael; she's a fool if she doesn't listen to her intuition. Go with the guy her new friends seem to trust.

I hope Fatima plays hard to get. Thus far it's been what, a day? That's not playing hard to get...that's waiting to get to know someone. He's coming on too strong and needs to back off. If she goes for him now, it'll be kinda cliche. She's too guarded for her walls to drop so fast.

Author's Response:

Yes, this she needs to ask Michael about the situation rather than Hassan. Knowing him, he would probably lie.

An  yes, she needs to play hard to get to know if Mike's feelings for her are REALLY true and not what just Arianne and everyone else says. But it's pretty obvious that's he's digging her and vice versa already which is fine, but not knowing what she went through in her past relationship, he should kind of back off and give her some space and time. 

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