Oh thats fine. As for the feedback I prefer.....hmmm, can I say it doesn't matter. Whatever you may feel about the story or what you do and don't like or if something may happen in the next chapter, it does not matter. Everyone has their own opinion and review about it. 

And I don't think I was being more specific when I was responding. The characters in this story is based on their characteristics that's how I come up with the characters to make it seem more believable than fake being that I know how they act with people and things like that. Or it doesn't have to be my friends exactly, just people I know very well. It's all about their characteristics and how they act not how they speak. And yes, I use punctuation and capitalize my words. Lol :) I read a few stories that don't seem to do that all the time. But being in honors English and do well in English since grade school on up, I can't help but to do what the rules say in a English book. :) 

And I'm sorry for any confusion about the location in this story, its in L.A. in California. Nobody's in Louisiana in this. But in the first chapter or two, if you read Fatima's pov, you would see that she was talking about 'Cali Coochie' girls as in messy California girls. I'm surprised you didn't see that. Everyone else who read this story knew the setting took place in California. But it's okay if you were confused. My apologies. But I'm still shocked you didn't see that. Lol.

Thank you so much. I think it comes naturally when you are surrounded by friends who kind of act like the characters in the story. I guess that helps to create a better naturalism for the characters instead of doing too much, ya know.

Thanks for the review and hope to hear more from you.

Lol, I wouldn't know cause I'm used to my home state traffic, which is Louisiana and Atlanta traffic when I visit family. I prefer theirs. Louisiana over anything though.

Her mom, well later on throughout the story you'll know what kind of job her mom is working at. But that's what a good job will get you that pays you better. 

Thanks for reviewing. :)

Girl, you see that don't you?? And Fatima alqays gone front stunt whatever else you wanna add in. Ans I'm sure she knows that by now too. When Mike gets to the arcade, no telling what might happen between them

Lol, girl I just be writing stuff like that in this story to make it funny. Tbh, the word 'poon' is a word I use to call the women's lower front region. Now, The Three Muskaroaches came from somewhere idk. It just came to me. Majority of the stuff in this story that is crazy is what I say in real life or would say. I say crazy shit like that.

Shanelle, she just a jealous ass, can't get no life bitch. Always worrying out Michael. Like its clear he don't want you anymore. Move along skeezer. She needed to be told off on anyway and put in hher place. 

And yes, Fatima finally followed his ass. She in for it now.

Lol, girl ikr. Yoh nike cyrls be a lil juicy. And Shanelle better stay in her lane. Aint nobidy got time for her ass. She wants Michael but the feelings aint the same. 

Hassan....for you to do him like that tho but hey! Peanut headed ass is what he do have. Kml!!!!

And fi ally Fatima, she finally amitted about fronting. She was fronting extremely hard but it was still obvious that her deelings were mutual for Mike tho. She just couldnt hide any longer. Cat is outta the bag now. And as for her ex Ace, whatevet was said or he did to make her feel the way she does, he gone get his soon. 

Lol, yess you gotta make em chase. And now that they are parterns, Mike gone try to use that as his advantage.

Let's just hope she asks him and not Hassan.