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Reviewer: Redone Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 10, 2016 07:59 am Title: Chapter 1

Welcome :)

My primary feedback would be to consolidate the chapters or make each chapter longer, with more happening. It's hard to get into a plot when chapters are brief.



Author's Response: Thanks! I'll definitely work on that. I really appreciate it. b29; I'm currently writing a chapter and I think this will be a bit longer than the others. Thanks again ^___^

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